Hey, I'm in 9th grade English Honors, can anyone check my 4th paragraph?
Shakespeare cares deeply for his male lover, and time proves to play a big role in Shakespeare’s relations with his male lover, examples can be found throughout Sonnet 15. This male lover is the primary discussion of Sonnet 15. His male lover is a loyal man that Shakespeare cares about a lot. Shakespeare’s male lover is believed to be a man named Henry Wriothesley (Brown 94). Wriothesley was a patron of Shakespeare, and the two became very well acquainted (Schoenbaum 83). Shakespeare faces conflicts with time as he sees how it takes away his lover’s youth, and how nothing lasts forever. Shakespeare says, “When I consider every thing that grows/Holds in perfection but a little moment” (lines 1-2). Here Shakespeare talks about time allowing people to be perfect for a short amount of time, this is referring to his male lover only being able to keep his youth for a certain period of time. Shakespeare says, “When I perceive that men as plants increase/Cheered and cheque'd even by the self-same sky” (lines 5-6). Shakespeare is referring here to how time made his male lover youthful, and young-looking, but only to a certain point of time, and then he began to age. Shakespeare also says, “To change your day of youth to sullied night” (line 12). Here Shakespeare is referring to his male lover turning old from his previous youth as time flows. Shakespeare is constantly facing struggles with time being too short, and taking the youth of his male lover, making his lover old, and less appealing.Any English Experts On Tonight?First sentene is run-on: new sentence beginning with %26quot;examples.%26quot;
Sentence in middle, beginning %26quot;Here Shakespeare talks about time%26quot; is a run on sentence.
You don't really need comma after youthful, but that is minor.
Last sentence, consider remove first %26quot;and,%26quot; remove last comma, and insert %26quot;and%26quot; before making.
Overall, nicely done.Any English Experts On Tonight?It looks good. Couldn't find any spelling mistakes and grammar looks fine.
Good job!Any English Experts On Tonight?It looks pretty good. A little repetitive with the phrase %26quot;his male lover%26quot; they know that that is who you are talking about. Also I'm not sure if this is meant to be an opinion paper but there is no proof that Sonnet 15 is about a male lover of Shakespeares that is only one possible explanation for the piece.
